tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post719945166559488051..comments2023-06-29T04:06:51.116-07:00Comments on Stories and Tales: GRANNY'S HOUSEPat Nurse MAhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01591807335364002658noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-57100782250883031792011-06-13T02:56:53.557-07:002011-06-13T02:56:53.557-07:00This is brilliant post you have shared and i reall...This is brilliant post you have shared and i really enjoyed this post.domain registration indiahttp://www.register-domainname.in/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-62306100556902587052011-06-10T01:39:49.463-07:002011-06-10T01:39:49.463-07:00Very nice article and straight to the point. I don...Very nice article and straight to the point. I don’t know if this is really the best place to ask but do you folks have any thoughts on where to employ some professional writers? Thank youweb domain registrationhttp://www.register-web-domain.innoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-85743994047555498482010-11-01T08:27:48.476-07:002010-11-01T08:27:48.476-07:00Thanks lizardyoga. I think you're right - too ...Thanks lizardyoga. I think you're right - too many deaths when the whole thing could be simplified. It started with three generations of women but that proved impossible to follow and really confusing but I think it could be slimlined more. <br /> I didn't really have a market in mind for any of these. They are just me practising until I feel more confident about my style. Once that happens, I'd like to move to attempting to write a novel.<br />Feedback very much appreciated :)Pat Nurse MAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01591807335364002658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-82040808088567181902010-11-01T07:46:31.195-07:002010-11-01T07:46:31.195-07:00I don't think it's 'writerly'. I ...I don't think it's 'writerly'. I think it's a good story although perhaps a bit long in getting to the denouement - I think you could 'wrap it up' a little quicker. I like the ambiguity about the Granny - is she trying to protect the child or is it something more sinister? Maybe you could simplify a little - rather than having 3 deaths, have the mother die in childbirth and the father go away and lose touch?<br />Stylistically I think it's right for Woman's weekly - was that your market? Not sure about the word 'rancid' near the beginning thoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-21364319243842658312010-08-08T17:58:08.797-07:002010-08-08T17:58:08.797-07:00Just keep writing. It's all practice. I've...Just keep writing. It's all practice. I've written things I look back on and think 'yeuk' but they sold at the time.<br /><br />If it gets the attention of readers, they really don't care about the mechanics.Dr. Dumehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13188222491937877163noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-24194074572928113612010-08-08T15:51:33.175-07:002010-08-08T15:51:33.175-07:00Thanks. By writerly, he means trying too hard, may...Thanks. By writerly, he means trying too hard, maybe a bit floral in places, perhaps - overdoing things, maybe. The other thing he said was I should focus more on the external than internal thought processes which is probably right as it does sound a bit clunky in places when exaggerating what "she thought" or "he thought".Pat Nurse MAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01591807335364002658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3333041329776894277.post-46060983958393795472010-08-08T15:15:13.569-07:002010-08-08T15:15:13.569-07:00An interesting tale. I didn't find it too '...An interesting tale. I didn't find it too 'writerly' although I'm not sure what that means. Isn't being 'writerly' the whole point of being a writer?<br /><br />Here's a useful place to get critiques - as long as you're prepared to reciprocate ;)<br /><br />http://www.critiquecircle.com/default.asp<br /><br />It does have its share of weirdoes but the admin team keep them under control. All in all, a good place to be a writer.Dr. Dumehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13188222491937877163noreply@blogger.com